Tuesday, August 16, 2011

Write on Wednesday - exercise 10 - Piqued.

Write On Wednesdays

A Gift of Serendipity... Take Felicity's Word of the Week. Write it at the top of your page. Set your timer for 5 minutes. Write the first words that come into your head after the Word of the Week. Stop writing when the buzzer rings.
Felicity's Word of the Week is...

A state of vexation caused by a perceived slight or indignity; a feeling of wounded pride.tr.v. piqued, piqu·ing, piques
1. To cause to feel resentment or indignation.
2. To provoke; arouse: The portrait piqued her curiosity.
3. To pride (oneself): He piqued himself on his stylish attire.
Enjoy! Try to have fun. You don't need to focus on the meaning of the word too much. No matter what you write, the point is to Get Writing and link your piece up to the linky below. Don't forget to say hi to Felicity and thank her for her gift...


The hot autumn sun beat down on Jack's face as he set up the easel. Sarah had smiled when he left, but the smile was tight and lack lustre. Too many hours away from the house painting, and Charlie was being a little bugger these days, hanging out late with his friends and moping about when he's home. I've got to make this just a quick sketch today and get home so she doesn't have to with the lad on her own.

In the moment he was thinking those thoughts, Jack's determination was quite real, within five minutes of sketching, the impression of the thoughts would not have been found under a microscope. Sketching and painting had that effect on Jack, it swallowed him whole and erased any concept of time and space, there was just creation.

Jack's eyes saw everything and saw nothing at the same time, it was as if the sights bypassed his mind and went straight to his hands. Often he didn't see the thing he was reproducing until it was on the canvas. 

It was in this way he first saw Svava; as her delicate and pale features came to life on the canvas. Her golden hair, tinged with copper, lay like a plaited cable over her left shoulder. Her large sky-blue eyes fixed on his face. He hadn't noticed her when he first arrived and as his eyes flicked up to properly see the original version, he was surprise to find no one. 


His hands continued to move over the canvas and she was still there, wearing a long dress in a mossy green fabric with intricate and colour embroidery along the hem. Now she seemed to be getting up to leave.

'No, stay.' he murmured, not wanting to frighten her. For a moment she froze in place and then she was gone. Gone from his hands and gone from the rock as his looked up.

Jack rubbed his face with the back of his hand, the sun was much lower in the sky than he'd realised. Sarah's strained smile would be a frown by now. Quickly he gathered his brushes and paints and folded the easel under his arm. He took one last look at the girl on the canvas and knew he'd be back up here tomorrow, even though Sarah needed him.

As people seemed to enjoy the story of Svava last week, I thought I'd look at the same scene from Jack's point of view this week - and piqued was the perfect would to enable me! I did go over 5 minutes again today, so the dashes represent the 5 minute mark-ish (I lost track of time, oops). Looking forward to reading everyone else's pieces!


  1. Lovely. Being lost in something is so nice. That's what writing does for me! It's also why I have to have a timer set... or no one would get fed.

  2. I'm sure that many of us will relate to the notion of losing time whilst engaged in a creative endeavour.

    It's also wonderful to be within the mind and behind the eyes of an artist seeing Svava come to life before him.

    A wonderful piece.

  3. Hi Sif. How are you? Thanks for your lovely comments.

    It was great that I got to see this from Jack's point of view. I loved the way you explained the way he painted. It's so true of most artists no matter what medium they use. Just excellent. Looking forward to reading more.

    Anne xx

  4. Sif, I'm so glad you wrote this - what a clever idea to have Jack's impression of seeing Svava!

    I particularly loved this: "Jack's eyes saw everything and saw nothing at the same time..."

  5. I love this story, it has to be one of my favourites. I love the way Jack loses himself in his work, how he isn't aware of his subject until it's completion. I can't wait for this to continue.

  6. Naomi, I should probably time doing this exercise for just before dinner time! I tend to do it late at night when the house is quiet - I need a better timer!

    Thank you everyone for your lovely encouragement! Looking forward to next week's exercise already!

  7. hi dear Sif :) I did a tutorial about the mouseover effect, here: http://www.anasofiaeugenio.com/2011/08/how-to-do-mouseover-effect.html

    I was amazed you had written so much in five minutes, but then you said you did go over that time. well done anyway :) it's a very interesting challenge. I don't feel so comfortable doing it in english because I'm portuguese (I live in Portugal) but I might give it a try! xoxo

  8. Sif - love this. I was excited once I realised you were giving us Jack's point of view and it worked well. You really added depth to last week's piece. I would love to see you keep working on this. What a beautiful concept! That Jack can see Svava while being deep in creativity. I see trouble brewing though, Sarah is not going to be happy!

  9. Hoping my comment wll 'take' this time. This is lovely Sif, I love that he saw everything and yet nothing totaly losinghimself in his art.

  10. My curiosity was definitely piqued. I had to go back and read last week's post since I missed it and wow, I LOVED it. I can't wait to read more!!

  11. It's can be tough being the partner of someone creative! We do get lost in our own world.
    Well done.

  12. Ana, thanks for the mouseover effect tutee link - that is going to be so useful to me!

    I'm so glad everyone enjoyed the scene from Jack's point of view - it was easier to describe Svava that way. There is always something left unsaid though, hehehe! Til next time! Jill, Sarah has nothing to worry about, you'll see!